1st Finalization or Generalization About My Sixteen Articles (1st Edition)
Michaelle Park
English Seminar II
1st Finalization or Generalization About My Sixteen Articles
Outline:
1. Introduction
a. The plan in the body
b. Granting
2. Body
a. Explanation of my problems.
b. I look for these on my writings like solutions and how can I explain each production more realistic, please!
c. What can I improve on each writing.
d. Do I have to correct several times on this essay, too?
3. Conclusion
a. To keep it stuck inside myself for as if like a teacher.
b. Acceptance of the methods to myself.
So far, I’ve written sixteen articles about sixteen musical productions I watched in my life and I made many grammatical errors and writing mistakes. Let me explain about my problems and solutions and about the improvements and explanations on each article.
Mr. Burell had advised me and pointed out my five problems several times, that my articles are too wordy and that there are some unnecessary sentences and paragraphs. There were no problems in writing and planning but in grammar. The problems were too long headlines, rhetorical questions, too long paragraphs, not italicized production titles, and unnecessary sentences. The headlines of 1st or 2nd editions were too long and I had to shorten them to less than ten. Many rhetorical questions were not necessary, so some of the articles have less than three. Readers are not interested in readings if the paragraphs are too long and they will get bored and quit in the middle. They have to be interesting to make the readers to go to theaters. So, I deducted some sentences and words. Italicization is an emphasis to make the readers get interested on the topic. I emphasized all of the pronouns and production titles in my articles.
I look for the most descriptive realisms on each article. Even with my best effort, some things are still missing. Like the basic storylines of each production, they emphasize many important realistic points of the characters, historical background, and moods through songs and lyrics. My articles have to be realistic and descriptive. There has to be variety of methods for this and they are the description and explanation of details of setting and professional movements of actors and actresses. So, this was why five percent was missing. Second, is about the melody and combined cultures of modern, ancient, and some folk and traditional musical instruments of other countries. Third, I have to mention what parts were interesting after watching. And the last, I have to mention what scenes were visually artistic.
What I can improve on each writings according to the five problems is to practice concentration and caution. I believe that being concentrated is another way to avoid the marks of pencil or pen of grammar errors. Second, I have to think whether I am writing the similar sentences I mentioned before. If I do, then, I have to cancel it. Third, I have to deduct some little topics that are not perfectly and closely related to my original topic. Fourth, some types of writings have dead ends and limitations. My articles are different and free and all of my final articles are limited to under four hundreds words. And the last, I have to single the spaces between paragraphs.
Yes, I have to make changes because it is traditional and habitual to all writers despite the fact that some of them decided not to do so. What Mr. Burell advised again is that good writers edit several times until the story sounds perfect. This is a key answer to my question why there are several editions of textbooks. For better-edited grammar, then the students might focus themselves on its perfection.
Now, all of the methods and some of the improvements are stocked in my brain as my personal writing teacher. To keep it stocked and accepted to myself, I have to repeat that as I write something because they are helpful, especially at short ones. So, I do not need to get anymore problems pointed out by instructors in the future.